英文email的格式不能照搬中文式的，比如：您好 这个称呼语。如果不知道对方名姓的话，就用Dear Sir/Miss, 知道的话就是Dear Mr.**/Miss **.
Thank you for taking time out of your busy schele to reply to me. I’ve updated the order and pls figure out the total value and let me informed. If the amount is accurate, I will remit the money to you. Please inform me when you got the payment and arrange delivery as soon as possible. Should there be any further questions, don’t hesitate to let me know. Please also verify your bank account: xxxxx
Thanks again for your efforts.
感谢您在百忙之中回复我的邮件，我从新更新了一下订单。您帮忙计算一下总价，然后告诉我。如果无误，我就给您打款了，请您在收到货款后通知我，尽快帮我安排发货，您看还有什么问题吗？XXX是您的账号，请核对下。谢谢。Thank you for your reply to my mail, I gave the orders from the updated. Your help to calculate the total price, then tell me. If that is right, I will give you money, please inform me as soon as possible after receiving payment, help me to arrange the shipment of the goods, you see what’s the problem? XXX is your account number, please check. Thank you.
Thanks for your replying on my E-mail ring your busy time. I have renewed the order
again already. Please co-operate in checking the total amount, and let me note the result.
I shall arrange the payment if the figure is correct. Please let me informed once you receive
the payment, and make arrangement of shipment for me as soon as possible. Please check and make sure if your account number is XXX or not. Contact me please if you have any other question.
I am waiting your prompt reply. And your kindly attention will be highly appreciated.
with Best Regards,
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THK UR REPLY MY E-ML. THE ORDER RENEWED. PLS CHK AMOUNT &(N) ACCOUNT
NO. i WL SND PAYMT IF CORRECT. PLS ALSO ADVISE ME RCVG PAYMT N ARRANGE
WAITG YR PROMPT REPLY. APPRECIATE YR CO-OPERATN.
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THKYRREPLY ORDERAMEND CHCKAMOUNT ACCOUNTNO. PAYMTWLSND SHIPMTASAP
谢你回复 订单已修改 核查金额 账号 货款将会出 尽快装运
Thanks for you attention in advance. I updated the order, please check the amount and let me know. If it is correct, I will make the payment. Once you get the payment, please inform me and arrange shipment as soon as possible. Please help to verify your account: XXXX, am I right?
Feel free to let me know if you have any other questions,